Thursday, December 15, 2011

English: Correct grammatical mistakes please?

Question:


"I would like to do international marketing work for a French company in Japan, or a Japanese company in France. Because of my work experience, I am very determined, assumed to study economic and I will do my great effort to achieve my goal."

P.S. it's a beginning of a motivation letter I'm writing to a French university. I already have worked professionally and am going to enter a university.

Answer:


"I would like to work either for a French company in Japan, or for a Japanese company in France, specialising in the international marketing field. Subsequent to my work experience, I am very determined to study economics and I will be making a great effort to achieve my goal."

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